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Open your eyes

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Literature Text

Fluttering leaves
Glittering dust
Do you believe
In unconditional trust?

Take my hand
Walk with me
Amongst the sand
Say what you see

You think you know
About the world
And that means so
I'm just a silly girl

When i see magic
And you say
You think it's tragic
You don't see things my way

Open your eyes
My clever friend
Clear the lies
That the unbelievers send
About a girl trying to make a boy understand the world, not just take it in.
© 2011 - 2024 DarkIronyinRedBlood
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WishingUnderThatStar's avatar
It is usual for me to not like rhyming schemes as quite often you find the words chosen sound forced which lets the poem down but in this it has been very well done. Each stanza flows well onto the next.
The opening really caught my interest with the use of great imagery and I found that this almost has a mystical, almost dream-like quality to the poem.